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剑桥雅思8作文范文Test1Task2

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摘要: 剑桥雅思8作文范文Test1Task2
剑桥雅思8作文范文Test1Task2

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名师点题剑桥雅思8作文
 
题目分析,包括写作中需要涉及的要点以及考生可能对题目产生的错误理解。
1. 需要关注双方的观点。
 
2. 由于答案不可能是仅靠父母或学校就能教育孩子们成为一名优秀的社会成员,因此,选择陈述双方的观点会更容易些。
 
3.“优秀的社会成员”并没有界定。但是,考生不必阐释出自己对其的定义。
建议的回答结构,对比此结构与考生有可能采用的不恰当结构。
 
这篇作文需要一个简短介绍和简要的结论。正文应有两到三个段落,每段阐述一个要点。考生可以选择三个及以上的段落,如果他们的文章超过 300 个单词的话。建议考生单独写一个段落来阐述与题目意见相反的观点,或者考生在正文各段中提及反方的观点。考生写文章时要尽量避免观点过于极端,最好不要建议仅由父母或仅由学校承担教育孩子成 为优秀的社会成员的重任。
 
名师点题剑桥雅思8作文
 

两篇观点不同的参考范文(250字—300字) 参考范文 1——建议是学校
Some people believe parents should teach their children to be good members of society, but I and others think school is the main place for this to be taught.
 
The main reason why I think schools should primarily be responsible for teaching children to be good members of society is that children spend more time at school with teachers than with their parents. The children are also in a formal learning environment. This combination provides more opportunities for teachers to show children how to behave as good members of society. The teachers can also ensure that all the children have the same chance to learn the same things about being good members of society.
 
If parents are made more responsible for teaching their children to be good members of society, then many parents might find they do not have the time for this. Parents have many responsibilities such as work and taking care of the home. Of course, many parents will naturally prefer to do other things with their children, such as having fun and visiting places of interest. In addition, some parents might not be as experienced as teachers at teaching children, so the children might not learn as well as at school.
 
There will always be plenty of parents who have the time, willingness and ability to teach their children to be good members of society. However, many more will find it difficult and need extra help. Some will ask other parents or consult books or websites. I do not think there is anything wrong with this, but we should not assume that all parents will do it.
 
In summary, I think parents will often teach their children to be good members of society, but this should mainly be done at schools.
(294 words)
 
一些人认为父母应该教育孩子成为优秀的社会成员,但我和另外一些人认为,学校应 该是承担这种教育的地方。
 
我认为学校应该首要承担教育孩子成为栋梁之才的主要原因是,孩子们在学校和老师 待的时间比与他们和父母待的时间长。此外,孩子们是在正式的学习环境下成长的。这两 点证明老师有更多的机会教给孩子们如何成为栋梁之才。同时,老师也能确保所有的孩子 有均等的学习机会,去学习成为优秀的社会成员的相同的知识。
 
如果让父母来承担教育孩子成为优秀的社会成员的主要责任,那么就会有很多父母发 现自己并没有时间来做这件事。父母承担着诸如工作和照顾家庭的责任。当然了,很多父 母自然更愿意为孩子做些其他的事情,比如陪孩子出去玩、游览名胜古迹等。除此之外, 一些父母可能不像老师那么经验丰富,所以孩子可能没有在学校学习得效果好。
 
常常是很多父母有时间、意愿和能力教育他们的孩子成为优秀的社会成员。但是,还 有很多父母会觉得做起来有困难,需要他人的帮助。有些父母会咨询其他父母,或求助于 书籍、网站。我不觉得这样做有什么问题,但是我们不能想当然的认为所有的父母都做得到。
 
总的来说,我觉得父母会常常教育孩子们成为优秀的社会成员,但这种教育主要还是 要学校来做。
 
名师点题剑桥雅思8作文
 
参考范文 2——建议是父母
I think that the main responsibility for teaching children to be good members of society lies with parents rather than schools and shall outline my reasons in this essay.
 
I think that most parents know their children well enough to be able to teach them to be good members of society. At school, children are often in large classes and therefore do not receive so much individual attention. When teaching children to be good members of society, I think that this individual attention is important, because some will have learnt about membership of society and others not. The parents will generally know this and be able to fill any missing gaps in their child’s knowledge.
 
Secondly, parents and their children will probably spend more time together in a variety of social situations, whereas teachers and their students spend most of their time together in the classroom. The variety of social situations gives the parents more teaching opportunities, for example while shopping, at public events and at family gatherings. Of course, these opportunities give children the chance to learn to be good members of society from other adults, not only from their parents.
 
Thirdly, I believe that schools and teachers should focus on academic subjects. There is often little enough time for these at schools, so making parents responsible for non- academic things, such as teaching children to become good members of society is a good idea. However, there will be opportunities for teachers to point out in class how children can be good members of society, for example when teaching children about the environment.
 
To conclude, I think there are clear advantages in having both parents and schools teach children how to be good members of society, but parents should take most of the responsibility.
(294 words)
 
我认为教育孩子成为优秀的社会成员主要责任在父母,而非学校。我会在下面这篇文 章中阐释理由。
 
我认为大部分父母都非常了解自己的孩子,进而有能力教育他们成为优秀的社会成员。 在学校里,孩子们常常上的是大课,因此并不是每个孩子都能受到很多关注。在教育孩子 成为优秀的社会成员时,我觉得对个人的关注很重要,因为有些会学着融入社会,有些则 不会。父母一般都对此有所了解,并能填补孩子的知识空白。
 
其次,父母和孩子会有更多机会一起参加各式各样的社交场合,而老师和学生却大部 分时间都是在教室里度过。各式各样的社交场合使得父母有更多的教育机会,例如,逛街、 公共场合、家庭聚会。当然,这些机会能使孩子向其他成人学习着成为优秀的社会成员, 而不仅仅是向父母学习。
 
再次,我认为学校和老师应该是专注于学术性科目教学,学校给学生进行社会教育的 也就少之又少。因此,家长更有责任教授一些非学术性的东西,比如,教育孩子成为优秀 的社会成员就是个不错的主意。但是,在课堂上,老师还是可以谈论如何使孩子们成为优 秀的社会成员,例如教给孩子们认识社会环境。
 
总而言之,我认为在教育孩子成为优秀的社会成员方面,父母和学校都能参与进来是 最好不过的,但是父母应该承担主要责任。
 
名师点题剑桥雅思8作文
 
参考范文中的词汇及结构分析,以及考生可能犯的错误。
1. 在介绍部分,作者均提到了各自的观点。其实没必要写出来,但这种做法却在中国的考 生中很常见。如果你要这样做,切记在写结论时不要使用同一词汇。
 
2. 两名作者在介绍部分都使用了“main”一词,为了说明他们并不认为责任仅在于学校或 父母。
 
3.在第一篇作文中,作者注意使用短小精悍的句子,比如 :The children are also in a formal learning environment. 使用过长的有语法错误的句子会使读者感到迷惑不解。
 
4.第一篇文章写道“This provides more opportunities for teachers ...”,以说明其他人也能 教育孩子。这样的用词避免了文章观点过于极端。
 
 
5.在第一篇作文正文第二三段中,作者对反方观点进行辩驳——父母应该教育孩子成为优 秀的社会成员,包括了其中存在的弊端,以及如何避免这些问题。
 
6. 注意使用对比性的语言——“the children might not learn as well as at school”。
 
7. 第二篇作文正文第二段最后一句,作者指出我们都有(部分)责任教育孩子成为优秀的
社会成员。
 
8. 第二位作者阐述的第三个理由对话题进行拓展,主要是说他 / 她认为学校应该做什么。 注意使用“should focus on”,而不是“should only”或相类似过于极端的词。
 
9. 第二篇文章正文第三段,作者指出老师也能教育孩子成为优秀的社会成员,并且举例证明。 从而使得文章全面客观,不会给人片面极端的感觉。
 


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